Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

-Vision-Well the fact that you basically copy-pasted Twilight in the same place and position in each panel reveals that you didn't put much forethought into the strip. The ponies are supposed to be animated, capable of portraying a spectrum of different poses and emotions. Additionally, the panel formatting and lack of background for each panel is disappointing in that you failed to convey the dynamism of living in the Ponies' world. Definitely lay out some sort of blueprints or a plan and do multiple revisions before you go with a final drawing next time.-Originality-I gave low marks for originality because the ever-defensive "Haters gonna hate" attitude is so overdone (especially among the MLP fandom and regarding this specific topic). I gave you a few extra marks because you at least referenced something from the series, which I guess I can appreciate.-Technique-I gave you at least more than zero stars because at least you know how to use MS Paint? And gradient fill...? Oh, and I guess you know how to use the copy-paste functions, because every panel is literally the same thing. You need to move beyond these if you want to improve. Use a more dynamic spectrum of inking and shading next time-- yes, even comic strips can use a just a little of that. Focus on featuring one of the great backgrounds from the show. Portray the character in a broader range of poses, emotions, and intensities. Tweak the style just a bit. Make it YOURS.-Impact-Again, everything falls flat because everything is so static. The same format panels are used, the same image of Twilight is used (with no background, ahhh!). Even the wall of text seems to be in the same place for each panel. The dialogue is pretty average, but I feel the final panel is anticlimactic-- there is no punchline that jumps out at me.-Overall-You might think I have been harsh, but that's because I feel like you're at the fulcrum of your artistic experience between stagnation (getting used to being mediocre) and a true breakthrough (developing something truly original and exciting through trial and error), and that you could really use that extra push towards the latter. My biggest piece of advice is to make multiple drafts and edits of the same comic strip before you finalize it. Increase the gestation period of your work, and I think you'll be quite amazed at what you can be capable of. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title="(Smile)"/>