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Let me start by saying this looks really nice, so much so that I've only a couple things to drop in your lap.



Now I don't really deal with fanart that much, so this first complaint may be erroneous but I'll voice my concerns anyway. I'm afraid that you changed too much about the character because I didn't recognize her at all, at least not until i read the description. The thing about anime and manga is that the base character models all look very similar ( not all the time but quiet often) and the main way we distinguish between two characters are their unique clothing and hair styles. Eye color is largely useless. Anyway, changing the outfit should be fine but I'd avoid changing the hairstyle as well, that or at least give us one of the character more recognizable traits to latch onto. ( like i said earlier, though, i'm spit-balling at little because fanart isn't my area of expertise).



Now onto the clothing. By and large the clothing works vary well, but one minor difficulty is the top part of her left boot. So you currently have the leftmost flap pointing toward the top left, but this feels very awkward/unnatural and I suggest having it follow the contours her her calf a little more.

The torso is suffering from a somewhat graver malady, namely the fact that Ruby looks a touch pudgy. This state arise from various affects, one of which is her rather quiet pose ( more on that later) which isn't pulling the baggy shirt in any direction. Because it isn't pulling the shirt in anyway, the shirt is left to dangle down and ( due to its baggy nature) it conceals much of the underlying form ( think girl wearing a man's hoodie). The next object that's adding to the illlusion of her weight is Ruby's under uniform. Judging from some quick references i looked up, this should be a rather form fitting piece of clothing but its almost as wide as her baggy over shirt. Okay, last reason she looks pudgy, the wrinkles are coming from the wrong places. Wrinkles are generally created by the cloth pulling against the body in some way. You current wrinkles seem to be pulling of the sides of her rib-cage but that shouldn't be happening because the shirt is too baggy. Furthermore, the bottom of the shirt isn't sitting on anything so there's nothing to push it up and makes wrinkles that bunch up in a horizontal fashion.

Okay, fixes. First I'd slim down her waist and hips, creating more space between the outer contours of her body and the outer edges of the outer shirt. Next I'd change the wrinkles and have them going more vertically than horizontally, possibly pulling down off the breasts. Lastly, make her pose a little more extreme, lift one arm into the sky so it pulls the shirt up with it and the shirt( in turn) starts pulling against the opposite side of her body.



This next difficult will be quick. The proportions of your head are a little off in the way that the neck feels to wide. If i were to offer a quick guess, I'd say you drew the neck to match the width of the head and hair combined rather than just the head. Either way, I suggest thinning down the neck a little and maybe shrinking the head a little too- a good rule of thumb is that the shoulder are twice as wide as the head.



Last thing. You've put ruby in an singer's outfit, dropped her on a stage and given her a mic with which to sing. All in all, she should be giving a performance of some sort. The problem is that she doesn't appear to be doing anything besides taking a rather bland pose. This sin't bad persay, but it might be a little boring as well as feel a little off. Consider having her dance or even just sing, maybe even strike a more engaging pose. Idk, its up to you.



Anyway, that's all I got for you I hope it helps.

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