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This look very cool and must have taken a lot of work. I would suggest going back and fine-tuning each individual word to adjust the kerning and alignment of many of the letters. There are several examples of text that is unnecessarily squished together or tilted at unnatural angles. Instead of relying on the original art for direction on how the text flows, I believe now that the groundwork is layed out you can manipulate and fine tune the words and letters in order to create a much more fluid work. Don't force the words into shapes, let them form shapes of their own. Good job!