i like some aspects of the story yes, however some things like the multiplier just annoyed me since it would basically make the rings favor those already gifted rather then treating everyone as an equal.





a tip is also that you handwave such things if you want them rather then giving such "accurate" numbers, just saying it multiplied her beauty several times of what she drained would flow better then throwing very inflated numbers into the mix, basically if it's more then 8 fold, it's probably better to say just "many" or "several times" since while humans can understand what 1000 times mean, it's hard to picture it in your mind.







while the other story you where inspired by is "the rings of exchange" these seem to be "the rings of drain", since nothing is traded, but that is fine since it's just "inspired by"





good work otherwise, have a nice day.

