Saw your post via the critique form!



I like the stylized sort of "flat+texture" you have going on for this. In some areas it works really well- like the red cloth and the skin- but in the background it feels messy. I noticed it first on the left side of the frame, where it is easier to notice the background element.



The mid-tone section of the hair seems too broad. From the lighting on the face it looks like there should be more shadows on the lower and right side of the hair.



I do really like the texture of the hair though.



Hope that helps!