Re: REVISE HOME BASE TALKING POINTS FOR HRC

Good. Sent from my iPad On May 17, 2015, at 3:23 PM, Robby Mook <re47@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:re47@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: I'm fine w that On May 17, 2015, at 3:20 PM, Dan Schwerin <dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: What about this as a base, and then she can drop in Israel when she's with donors: • Fourth and finally, we have to protect our country from the global threats that we see, from terrorists to dictators to diseases – and the ones that are still over the horizon. We have to assert confident American leadership to shape global events rather than be shaped by them. That includes taking on global warming and those who continue to deny that it exists. And it means always standing up for our allies and our values, especially our fellow democracies. On Sun, May 17, 2015 at 3:09 PM, Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: I won't fall on sword over Israel but we need more than climate in that paragraph. On May 17, 2015, at 3:04 PM, Robby Mook <re47@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:re47@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: I'm w Joel. We shouldn't have Israel at public events. Especially dem activists. On May 17, 2015, at 2:48 PM, Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: She was Secretary of State. On May 17, 2015, at 2:39 PM, Joel Benenson <jbenenson@bsgco.com<mailto:jbenenson@bsgco.com>> wrote: Why would we call out Israel in public events now? The only voters elevating FP at all are Republican primary voters. To me we deal with this in stride when an if we are asked about FP Sent from my iPhone On May 17, 2015, at 2:21 PM, Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: We def need the etc. I think good to have Israel too. On May 17, 2015, at 1:13 PM, Mandy Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com<mailto:gruncom@aol.com>> wrote: I though this was largely for her TP with public events not fundraisers. Do we need Israel etc for that? Mandy Grunwald Grunwald Communications 202 973-9400<tel:202%20973-9400> On May 17, 2015, at 1:00 PM, Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: Would add a sentence on standing up for our allies and our values, including Israel and other fellow democracies, and confronting terrorists and dictators with strength and cunning. On May 17, 2015, at 12:12 PM, John Podesta <john.podesta@gmail.com<mailto:john.podesta@gmail.com>> wrote: 3 small suggestions: 1) if we are going to talk about building the economy for tomorrow, we should work in the the words innovation and sustainable someplace. Both are dog whistle words. 2) more people are working more jobs is ambiguous and subject to different meaning. Do we mean more people are working two or more jobs? 3) I've tried this one before but in the democracy fight, I still think it's stronger to say "I'll appoint Supreme Court Justices who will protect the the right to vote and not the right of a few billionaires to buy elections." Bernie has now linked Citizens United to Court appointments which may make this more or less desirable. On Sunday, May 17, 2015, Dan Schwerin <dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com<mailto:dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com>> wrote: I think it's very nice On May 17, 2015, at 11:32 AM, Mandyt Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com> wrote: Attached is a draft of the Home Base intro talking points, using some of HRC's new language. This reflects Joel's edits too. Please let me know what you think. If people are happy with this, please get to HRC. thx Mandy Grunwald Grunwald Communications 202 973-9400<tel:202%20973-9400> ----- Yes--that's my understanding. On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 5:14 PM, Mandy Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com> wrote: And just to be clear -- she is looking for a tighter version of the opening she has been doing at events/fundraisers -- that is still Four Fights -- but reflects some of her favorite new additions (like mental health)-- without being a laundry list. Is that correct? Mandy Grunwald Grunwald Communications 202 973-9400<tel:202%20973-9400> ----- Yes that would be ideal. This way she will have tomorrow afternoon/evening to review and can give feedback by Monday am. Sent from my iPhone On May 16, 2015, at 4:30 PM, Robby Mook < re47@hillaryclinton.com> wrote: Since it sounds like we won't have the paragraphs until later today and since we need the new home base by mid day tomorrow, I think we should just move forward with a revised home base using what we have right now--essentially refining the core message and four fights. I appreciate trying to start to pivot to where we want to go with the speech, but my larger concern is that she have sufficient time with the material. On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 1:27 PM, Mandy Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com> wrote: I was hoping to see new speech paragraphs, so we could align the home base language with new announce language. Mandy Grunwald Grunwald Communications 202 973-9400<tel:202%20973-9400> > On May 16, 2015, at 1:05 PM, Kristina Schake < kschake@hillaryclinton.com> wrote: > > Huma, you mean the home base language for her message events and > fundraisers until the launch? Basically the topper for every event > that hits our core message before adding the issue of that day. Mandy > is helping us write that. Mandy I know we asked you for a lot this > weekend. Possible to do by noon tomorrow? > > > Sent from my iPhone > >> On May 16, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Huma Abedin < ha16@hillaryclinton.com> wrote: >> >> Where are you guys on home base language? Can we get by 12pm tomorrow? >> >> Sent from my iPhone >> >>> On May 14, 2015, at 4:35 PM, Dan Schwerin < dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com> wrote: >>> >>> Team, here is a first draft of the Launch Speech. Thanks to Lissa Muscatine and Jon Favreau for great work on this, and to Joel for his advice. >>> >>> This rough draft is very much a work in progress and there are a number of questions to consider as you read. >>> >>> -- At this stage, we're most concerned with structure and themes. In general, it would be great if you could focus for now on those issues rather than specific language. >>> -- You'll see that "It's Your Time" is not in here yet. Jon and Lissa, with fresh eyes, both raised concerns that this wouldn't work well here, if at all. Joel also has concerns. So that's worth discussing. >>> -- "The Vision Thing." This remains a challenge. As you read, does it feel like a vision for the future comes through? If not, that's a place we really need to focus. >>> -- The Four Fights. I think nobody really loves the Four Fights but we haven't come up with a better frame for her policy agenda. If there's a great alternative, we should sell her on it. If not, we should try to make sure the Four Fights feels coherent and big enough to carry the agenda and stand up to the echo of Roosevelt's Four Freedoms. >>> -- This is too long, so suggested cuts would be very welcome. >>> >>> We have committed to give HRC a draft to read over the weekend, but then we have several weeks to get this right. So it would be great for folks to send me thoughts and reactions via email tonight or tomorrow morning. And then we can look forward to more in depth conversations down the road. >>> >>> Thanks very much. >>> Dan >>> <2015-05-14 Launch Speech - 4pm.docx> <HRC Home Base Intro 5-17.docx>