I deleted some rests in 8-9 and 52-53, and made it easier to read and play. (The player would probably just use the pedal anyway, but without one, RH now only stretches to a 9th)

16 is now up the octave, and I fixed some wrong notes in 18.

I put 6ths and 3rds in 16-19. A really skilled player might be able to play the passage at tempo, but most would probably opt to just play the top line.

33's glissando is notated better

46 and 48 have fuller chords, as in the recording (and your suggestion)

The cluster chord in 54 is now written with rectangles instead of the notation I had before.

59 now has a crescendoing tremolo.

I fixed the URL.

Thanks JDMEK5! I made some changes after some critique from my piano-playing colleagues, some guidelines from the music typesetting reference book Behind Bars by Elaine Gould, as well as just some careful listening.I don't know about adding fermatas to the score; there doesn't appear to be any in the song (except maybe at 33, but that notation would be a bit confusing)I'm pretty happy with the way this turned out, especially considering I'm not an experienced pianist and this is my second piano arrangement ever. If there's no other criticism, I'm going to bring this to the submission page!