Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

Alright, I guess I should address those stars.Vision - 5: You're telling your story and I'm in it, your vision's coming through. Kind of doing a single page like this is weird, because it's going to have a completely different standing once it's part of 50 or howevermany pages. It's like judging a single square of a sidewalk - the most important function of a sidewalk is to lead you through, so judging the cracks in one panel will only mean so much. But it is good to keep it tidy.Originality - 4.5: This is more based on my personal knowledge and not just on the singularity of said page.Technique - 4. But, if to nitpick the cracks - Fluttershy's hair is a little flat (or her sidehead a little overinflated), Applejack's profile-mouth in the last panel is a little... confused (something about that corner line and jaw shape make me want to either see a bit of the inside of the mouth, or just a different lower jaw shape) and, while panel 3/4 Pinkie and Twilight are handled excellently... you gotta be careful about the shared pony frame. Their head direction, eye direction and mouth shape are pretty close, and there's kind of a weird animation-semblance going on bt/w those two panels. I would have Twilight looking towards page left. It would be an easy(ish) fix and close that compositional circle as well.Impact - 5. Like I said, these are cracks in the concrete. But this page will never stand alone like this. It's the lead in, to the rest of a lead in, to a fantastic journey. In reading my eyes might spend 1/100th of the time on this page, as they have today. And the read-through delivery is shimmering, mystical, and makes me want more.