It's a good fic, as long as you're willing to discard two things. One, that Cinder orchestrated a school shooting. Two, that the writers of RWBY showed us nothing humanizing about Cinder BEFORE said school shooting. In canon, the time to humanize Cinde in ANY way came and went with the Invasion, which is her happily swan-diving off of the Moral Event Horizon, to use a TVTrope term. While this is really the ONLY way I can see Cinder genuinely joining the heroes (through an invasive influence that affects her very thought process and mindset, which would affect her decision-making), the romance angle is narrative suicide. We as the audience get nothing to humanize Cinder (and have yet to, even if it is too late), and they as the cast of characters would never truly accept her. She attacked their school. She killed their friends. Why would ANY of them WANT to truly bond with Cinder, even if they KNEW of Pyrrha's invasive influence? Odds are, they'd be holding out hope that Pyrrha takes her over completely. Nora is right to call things out, and the fact that she's the last holdout only serves to underscore how utterly ridiculous the romance aspect is. The fact that Pyrrha herself seems to give them her blessing at the end is just....WRONG.



It's a good picture nonetheless. The source material, far less so.