One of the most important things when choosing a face claim for your role play OC is choosing something fitting.

Choosing Stocking, who has two hair colors and a modern gothic lolita style, would be a bad choice for an OC that’s supposed to go into the historical fantasy setting of Fire Emblem. Go look at Final Fantasy characters or something, don’t use something so modern looking…

But that’s just the tip of the iceberg.

Name: Clover Starting Class: Dancer

Then why not choose a face claim that looks like a dancer? Most dancers in Fire Emblem wear belly dancer’s type of garb. It’s like either no thought was put into the job, no thought was put into the FC, or both.

And NOTHING in her story says anything about how she even learned to dance.

Personality: When she was younger, she was a very sweet and helpful girl, if not a bit cowardly. She loved her father more than anything in the world. Whenever she was scared she would go running towards her father. When her family died, Clover fell into despair.

Wait. What? That was so damn sudden. How did they die? When did they die? What is going on?

After wallowing in self-pity, she had an ultimatum and decided in order to avenge her family she will have to travel back in time to kill Grima itself.

Oh, so she’s a child from the future? I… This should all probably be explained better, and probably listed under “History” or something instead of personality.

Clover gained a sadistic streak and it was then revealed she too had a fascination of blood and killing.

ALWAYS.

Just why. WHY. Why are so many fan characters on tumblr just sadistic and evil out of nowhere? It’s so cliche and honestly not that fun to RP with.

Also, she is a DANCER. Before awakening they couldn’t even fight, and they’re supposed to be a support class. None of these decisions make ANY sense.

Some might mistake her for a Grimeal.

Really? The evil cult. Why? Because she just exudes an aura of *~*~Kawaii Edgy Evil ™*~*~

Honestly this doesn’t even make sense since Robin/My Unit walks around with a Grimeal tattoo and overcoat and nobody says a word to them about it.

Meeting her for the first time she comes off as very distant but polite. As soon as someone crosses her she becomes rather ruthless.

This is so cliche. She’s such a typical emo killing-machine OC, honestly.

Clover learned that she could use her “assets” to her advantage in certain situations.

Whenever I see something along the lines of “She manipulates men with her sexy body~” in a profile, it always makes me rub my temples. Usually because it’s not treated as a proper personality trait or example of their morality, but rather as a poor fucking excuse to tell the audience “Pay attention because she’s so so SO sexy!!!!1!”

Despite that, she hates being touched, especially by old men.

If you are actively trying to bait and manipulate people using sexual appeal, you really lose the right to complain about getting unwanted attention.

Not to mention, this is so contradictory!

Underneath the layers of hatred, bitterness and anger is a girl who is terrified out of her mind.

Let us all pity the girl who is uncontrollably violent and enjoys the pain of others.

Suggestions for improvement:

- Develop her personality more. Right now she’s just a collection of cliches.

- Make her a more fitting class. A sorcerer/dark mage would fit the edgy, evil, borderline-Grimleal look this OC is trying to pull off. And an assassin would be more fitting for her killing preferences and blood fixation. Either would fit her current personality.

- OR. Modify her personality, history, and face claim to fit a dancer. Granted, this is much more work.

- Pick a face claim more fitting to the setting. Final Fantasy characters, Bravely Default characters, and other fantasy rpg characters would be good to look at. Ys has some great characters and looks for Fire Emblem FCs. Just keep looking til you find something that fits the setting above all else.

- Expand on her history.

-Ace