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Tom or Ryan- please send Leah the final WORD version. - TP On May 20, 2016, at 2:43 PM, Leah Daughtry <ldaughtry@demconvention.com<mailto:ldaughtry@demconvention.com>> wrote: I can't see the speech, can someone forward? Thanks. -------- Original message -------- Plus Leah and April who are running the roll out. Sent via the Samsung GALAXY S®4, an AT&T 4G LTE smartphone -------- Original message -------- ​​​​​ Hilary Rosen | SKDKnickerbocker 202.464.6969 (O) | 202.320.2711 (C) | HRosen@SKDKnick.com<http://knick.com> 1150 18th Street NW, Suite 800, Washington DC 20036 Twitter: @hilaryr <image001.png> Got it. I'll print. ________________________________ Ready to print. On May 20, 2016, at 12:59 PM, Walsh, Tom <WalshT@dnc.org<mailto:WalshT@dnc.org>> wrote: Got it – working on it Attached are: 1. ‘DWS ASDC Speech – START WITH THIS’ --> use this as your base document to edit 2. ‘DWS ASDC Speech tp edits’ PDF --> these are the Chairwoman’s edits --> Tom make these first 3. ‘DWS ASDC Speech – SKD edits’ --> Tom these are the edits that Anita and Hilary sent over; make these last Tom --> after making the edits please reply all and send on this thread. Kate --> please print in Philadelphia (2 copies) and we will do speech prep when we arrive. Yes, we are. Sent from my BlackBerry 10 smartphone. Biggest thing for me is that we should drop the paragraph on the Egypt Air crash entirely. ________________________________ Garret Bonosky Deputy Director Office of the Chair Democratic National Committee On May 20, 2016, at 12:26 PM, Walsh, Tom <WalshT@dnc.org<mailto:WalshT@dnc.org>> wrote: Thanks, working on it ----- Attached is the word doc ----- Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document. Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia ----- Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help. Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated Page 2, Line Drawing (Red) Page 4, Line Drawing (Red) Page 4, Line Drawing (Red) Page 4, Typewriter (Red): Comment: elect a Democrat, once again. Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 8, Typewriter (Red): Comment: for whom Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 8, Typewriter (Red): Comment: it Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 8, Typewriter (Red): Comment: originally, Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) Page 9, Line Drawing (Red) Page 9, Typewriter (Red): Comment: happened? Page 9, Line Drawing (Red) Page 10, Line Drawing (Red) Page 11, Line Drawing (Red) Page 12, Line Drawing (Red) Page 14, Line Drawing (Red) Page 14, Line Drawing (Red) Page 14, Typewriter (Red): Comment: And Hillary declared it a terrorist act yesterday too. Page 15, Line Drawing (Red) Page 15, Typewriter (Red): Comment: gloss over Page 15, Line Drawing (Red) Page 17, Line Drawing (Red) Page 20, Line Drawing (Red) Page 20, Typewriter (Red): Comment: strengthened our Page 20, Line Drawing (Red) Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) Page 22, Typewriter (Red): Comment: then Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Typewriter (Red): Comment: get our work done Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Typewriter (Red): Comment: heard Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Typewriter (Red): Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 23, Typewriter (Red): Comment: the Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) Page 24, Line Drawing (Red) Page 24, Line Drawing (Red) Page 24, Typewriter (Red): Comment: Dangerous Page 26, Line Drawing (Red) Page 27, Line Drawing (Red) Page 27, Typewriter (Red): Comment: of Page 27, Line Drawing (Red) Page 28, Line Drawing (Red) Page 30, Line Drawing (Red) -- Marked up using iAnnotate PDF on my iPad