I played til they finally liked my song! The story is entertaining and funny in places (and yes, I chose the I want women option!), but this has some big issues- first thing is that the resolution is too large for my laptop screen (although the bottom is all empty space). Second, this needs thorough proofreading. The opening page has "it's great mines and their wise merchants"- there shouldn't be an apostrophe in 'its' when it's a possessive and 'their' feels like it's being falsely used as a synonym for 'its'. Also, "It's night time... cheer poured out the windowns". Aside from the clear typo, you're switching tenses (present to past) in the same paragraph, and this happens a lot.

Even just putting this through MS Word spellcheck will get rid of most of the typos, but taking a couple of hours to sit down and go over your story will definitely pay off for future projects.