Re: Edits attached

Guys, this has nothing to do with the rollout. Hilary was suggesting that we shorten the speech into a Medium post. April and Leah were not in our meeting yesterday but the Kirk and Dean suggestion was related to having them jointly sign an op-ed or Medium post explaining what does and does not happen at the Dem Convention. DWS > On May 20, 2016, at 1:32 PM, Miranda, Luis <MirandaL@dnc.org> wrote: > > Plus Leah and April who are running the roll out. > > > > Sent via the Samsung GALAXY S®4, an AT&T 4G LTE smartphone > > > -------- Original message -------- > From: Hilary Rosen <HRosen@skdknick.com> > Date: 05/20/2016 13:25 (GMT-05:00) > To: "Miranda, Luis" <MirandaL@dnc.org>, "Walsh, Tom" <WalshT@dnc.org>, Kate Houghton <HoughtonK@dnc.org> > Cc: "Bonosky, Garret" <BonoskyG@dnc.org>, Debbie Wasserman Schultz <hrtsleeve@gmail.com>, "Guerra, Liana" <GuerraL@dnc.org>, Tracie Pough <PoughT@dnc.org>, "Banfill, Ryan" <BanfillR@dnc.org>, Anita Dunn <adunn@skdknick.com> > Subject: RE: Edits attached > > Where are we with the Paul Kirk howard Dan ideas? I ask because I think this speech could be shortened a bit and published on Medium a few hours after she gives it. > > > > > > ​​​​​ > > > > Hilary Rosen | SKDKnickerbocker > > 202.464.6969 (O) | 202.320.2711 (C) | HRosen@SKDKnick.com > > 1150 18th Street NW, Suite 800, Washington DC 20036 > > Twitter: @hilaryr > > > > <image001.png> > > > > From: Miranda, Luis [mailto:MirandaL@dnc.org] > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:21 PM > To: Walsh, Tom <WalshT@dnc.org>; Kate Houghton <HoughtonK@dnc.org> > Cc: Bonosky, Garret <BonoskyG@dnc.org>; Debbie Wasserman Schultz <hrtsleeve@gmail.com>; Guerra, Liana <GuerraL@dnc.org>; Tracie Pough <PoughT@dnc.org>; Banfill, Ryan <BanfillR@dnc.org>; Anita Dunn <adunn@skdknick.com>; Hilary Rosen <HRosen@skdknick.com> > Subject: RE: Edits attached > > > > Got it. I'll print. > > > > > > From: Walsh, Tom > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:18 PM > To: Kate Houghton > Cc: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: Edits attached > > > > > > From: Kate Houghton > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:14 PM > To: Walsh, Tom > Cc: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > > > Ready to print. > > > On May 20, 2016, at 12:59 PM, Walsh, Tom <WalshT@dnc.org> wrote: > > Got it – working on it > > > > From: Bonosky, Garret > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:59 PM > To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Walsh, Tom > Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > > > Attached are: > > > > 1. ‘DWS ASDC Speech – START WITH THIS’ à use this as your base document to edit > > 2. ‘DWS ASDC Speech tp edits’ PDF à these are the Chairwoman’s edits à Tom make these first > > 3. ‘DWS ASDC Speech – SKD edits’ à Tom these are the edits that Anita and Hilary sent over; make these last > > > > Tom à after making the edits please reply all and send on this thread. > > > > Kate à please print in Philadelphia (2 copies) and we will do speech prep when we arrive. > > > > From: Debbie Wasserman Schultz [mailto:hrtsleeve@gmail.com] > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:48 PM > To: Miranda, Luis; Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom > Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > > > Yes, we are. > > > > Sent from my BlackBerry 10 smartphone. > > From: Miranda, Luis > > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:38 PM > > To: Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom > > Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > > Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > > > Biggest thing for me is that we should drop the paragraph on the Egypt Air crash entirely. > > > > > > From: Bonosky, Garret > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:34 PM > To: Walsh, Tom > Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Miranda, Luis; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > Tom - Also have additional changes Anita sent; I will send over shortly, make the chairwoman's changes now and then make the Anita edits I send shortly. > > Garret Bonosky > > Deputy Director > > Office of the Chair > > Democratic National Committee > > > > > On May 20, 2016, at 12:26 PM, Walsh, Tom <WalshT@dnc.org> wrote: > > Thanks, working on it > > ----- > From: Guerra, Liana > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:25 PM > To: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis > Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > Attached is the word doc > > ----- > From: Bonosky, Garret > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:24 PM > To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis > Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen; Guerra, Liana > Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document. > > Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia > > ----- > From: hrtsleeve@gmail.com [mailto:hrtsleeve@gmail.com] > Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:07 PM > To: Bonosky, Garret; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis > Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen > Subject: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help. > > Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated > > Page 2, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 4, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 4, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 4, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: elect a Democrat, once again. > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 8, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: for whom > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 8, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: it > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 8, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: originally, > > Page 8, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 9, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 9, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: happened? > > Page 9, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 10, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 11, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 12, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 14, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 14, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 14, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: And Hillary declared it a terrorist act yesterday too. > > Page 15, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 15, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: gloss over > > Page 15, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 17, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 20, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 20, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: strengthened our > > Page 20, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 22, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: then > > Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 22, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: get our work done > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: heard > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Typewriter (Red): > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 23, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: the > > Page 23, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 24, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 24, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 24, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: Dangerous > > Page 26, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 27, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 27, Typewriter (Red): > Comment: of > > Page 27, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 28, Line Drawing (Red) > > Page 30, Line Drawing (Red) > > > -- > > Marked up using iAnnotate PDF on my iPad > >