Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

Well! this is is beginning to get quite exciting! Really, this strip has offered a spectacular amount of character development, and has changed how I expected this story to turn out. Derpy's scene is really heartbreaking, mostly due to how you convey the artwork and the character. However, Derpy still needs a bit more development in this story, but you seem to be resolving that starting with this strip. This scene with Derpy and the Doctor is what really holds the comic together for me (I honestly prefer shippings between the Doctor and Derpy more than any of the actual Doctor Who shippings), as we feel Derpy's pain, but I'm also enjoying the relationship between Lyra and Bon-Bon, and how worried Bon-Bon is for her, really creating a believable situation between the two. I can't wait for the next chapter in this tale, and hope that you manage to keep the momentum of the story, while improving where you are flawed. Great work!