It's a really good attepmt. The subs read very easy and they are short enough. Problem with subs is that you have to explain everything they say shorter and more simple than in normal translations, so I think you did that in most parts very good. Some parts are maybe too complicated, like complicated words that could have been translated easier, but all in all it's a great first attempt.If you know Japanese, I suggest you try translation groups for anime. They are searching all the time and people are really desperate to find others. They tried to recruit me at least 5 times in the last few months, so give it a go if you have time. Anime subs have more free space, to call it like that for lack of better words. You can find your own style and you have the whole screen, including different typing styles, etc, to really emphasise the things you want to get though.If not that, I suggest you find the other DOS Sailor Moon game I mention, since ithas simmilar story lines in the middle of each fighting sceene end, so you can always try more to get better at it, if you like to do such thingspractice makes you better (I can guarantee this from my own experience) XD