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Very strong usage of color flow and almost gentle dreamy like substance to the overall composition. However, structure wise I believe the piece falls short on several levels. The first regards the left side having almost no purpose and throws the balance of the image off focus. One point perspective feels wasted. My eyes are flowing to the vanishing point but nothing is there. No feeling of curiosity as to WHAT could be over there. Just bright light implying something but overall nothing to give any feeling of temptation. Hues used near the deer come off as extremely flat compared to the rest of the clouds. The body could use more reflections from the clouds.Moving on to the imagery, the narwhal-esque figure has a beautiful flow and lacks the rigidness often seen in drawing creatures. There is a sense of volume expressed on the stomach but not fully well placed. Other parts of the narwhal remain flat, with usage of strong contour line only contributing more to an otherwise volumetric figure. The stars on the body feel too "patternly" and gives an artificial feel to an otherwise beautiful surrealism.The figure is beautifully portrayed as having a dreamy mood to it. The contours really give it a feeling of other worldliness and child like curiousity. Still her(?) shoes come off as very flat, and hips disproportionately large for her body (but this may still be correct. Her book follows too strict of a one point perspective , and she appears to be missing a wing (unless she is suppose to have one wing and/or I am blind). The wing-like item on her lower back feels unnatural and lacks some light logic.Lastly are the deer. I do not believe deer run close to what is portrayed in the upper right. The feeling feels more as if dogs are running into... something. Some deer are done fine, but many come off as flat and pasted on, with others coming off as overall too bright.None of the deer feel particularly making contact with the ground they run on.Nonetheless, even though I may come off as negative, I do really enjoy this piece you have composed. I believe it does express the intention, and just needs a little bit more polishing up here and there to really bring it to the next level.