Okay, if you want some comment on your art work, here's what I thought:



Your story can make many sad, if that's your intention, then good job. Also your story is simple to understand visually and text. Decent job.



Your first line of pictures (small at first picture, then bigger picture, then a more bigger picture...) brings out a feeling that Dinky is running towards the reader, however, I think in this comic you use it inaccurately, as you did draw out Dinky is running side ways, and only the fourth panel shows her running towards the reader. If you are using that style, maybe you can draw Dinky running towards the reader from first panel until the fourth panel.



You did good on facial expression, but at the last second panel, Amy (Amethyst Star, is it?) seems lowering her head. The nose and mouth can tilt more lower, otherwise, it looks like the horn has been relocated.



Also, the comic style you use are more suitable for memory scene, flashback or dreaming. As a result, it doesn't fit nicely in this story you are trying to express. I thought this is actually a flash back from Dinky's memory but I couldn't find any hint that Dinky is talking about her past or thinking of it, or dreaming about it. I think the classic panel are more suitable for this comic.



Over all, you did a good job, except for unnoticeable flaw. Keep up the good work.