Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

...Eh. Now for critique... I'm going to be very blunt here; this needs a lot of work. The opening vision you have for this is understandable enough; Twilight returning to Ponyville after her exploits in the human realm. And the first thing she does is... Peanut butter crackers? I see the reference to the film here; the film itself had Trixie in her normal, boasting persona. It had a good buildup and a humorous payoff. In this though, it comes off as sloppy. The payoff you have here is not very funny. And as for the subplot involving Lyra and Bon Bon reading about this... It's been done. A lot. To the point where the joke has stopped being funny. Originality and vision aside, the technique used here is similar to the joke; sloppy. There are several clipping issues in some of the panels on both the ponies and the objects, Twilight doesn't even have wings in most of the first panels, the background jumps from being pixelated to high res. Not to mention that the ponies themselves are very poorly composed; the strokes are inconsistent, the facial expressions are off... It all seems rushed. Impact overall?... Eh. Considering the quality of the work, the humor and payoff, and the overall execution of the comic, it falls short. There are some things I did enjoy however; the nod to the movie, and some of the articles on the paper gave me a good chuckle.Overall... A piece that needs improving e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="402" title="(Blank Stare)"/>