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Right now it looks like a final product, but don't take my word for it, I'm not too good at all this. Gratz!

Thanks for the advice! Some comments: 1. I think gifs are okay since SCP-895 has one, possibly several others I cannot think of at the moment. 2. Fixed that due to your advice. Thanks! Sort of just wanted myself to be a cameo in here so I put that there, this seems a lot more clearer now. 3. I didn't remove this one because I dunno, seemed sort of minor and removing it just felt wrong to me for some reason. 4. Fixed! Thanks! 5. I rearranged it a bit, not to exactly what you said but I think that the new one is a bit better. Thanks you for the critiques, they are really helpful.

Hello! Let me start by saying I think this is a great idea! A costume that kills its wearer is something that we've seen before but this is fresh and interesting. If I may, some corrections I would make are as follows: 1: I'm not sure if it's ok to use a gif file, because the site has some issues w/ data storage or something (please correct me). On the other hand, thanks for using the correct formatting on the photo. 2: A frequent error is assigning a role in containment to one specific person. What if Doctor Hoffman is on vacation, sick or deceased? You can keep Dr. Hoffman & fix the error by stating "Testing must only be performed on D-Class subjects and have approval by a Site-07 Head Researcher, currently Doctor Hoffman." 3: Usually tests are only performed on D-class, so it's probably not necessary to say only testing on D-class. 4: "being put on the zipper on the back" should be "being put on, the zipper on the back" 5: Something about the clinical tone in the phrase "…food source and shelter but how they got all the resources to be able to breed and build a hive…" seems off. If I were to rewrite it I would state "…food source and shelter. However, the process they took to get all the resources to be able to breed and build a hive…". This one's just nitpicky.

Okay fixed that. Thanks!

I think what you've got is solid, but I also don't think you're supposed to censor anything in the "containment" section—after all, if there was to be a containment breach (not necessarily with this particular skip) then knowing everything about containing it would be quite handy.

Any critiques would be appreciated! Thanks! http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/bee-bear-suit

SCP draft that needs some critiques!

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