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I always look forward to these comics, your work is definitely enjoyable.Vision: Not entirely sure what this means so I'm substituting this for style and intent. The ideas in this comic were concise, delivered well, overall. Love the little details like bonbon's cheek getting squished up against lyra's head, and the pulling up of lyra's mouth in the last pane. The addition of background silhouettes in the background, while subtle, totally add to the admosphere and make a huge difference.Originality: I've yet to see this idea done, that counts for originality in my book :>Technique: I get the feel of action lines very nicely in this piece. It definitely gives bonbon the sense of pulling on lyra as she tries to tug on lyra. Referencing the previous point, backgrounds were simple but effective. I feel thatImpact: I feel like the emotions couldve been slightly more exaggerated in the fifth pane in particular. The upper eyelid curves the same way as the lower one giving the impression she's either cold or tired. Wouldve helped to have it slant downward (upper most part towards the outside) to give her more of a threatening appearance.Like I mentioned I always look forward to your stuff, you have a way of pulling off this style so well it's a pleasure to look at. I think if had to recommend anything to work on it would just be to be a tad more expressive, though I've seen from your previous works you definitely can do that e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title="(Smile)"/>