So the song starts off very promising. I hear a wicked bass going on, the kick is nice and clean, and the overall quality sounds great. Also, cheesy toms. That gets a nod of respect from me. But after the first 30 seconds, the song takes a bit of a dive. It sounded like you tried to put in a melody to keep it interesting, but it was buried under the beat and didn't really pull me in.

The transition from 2:18 to 2:21 was less than stellar. It reminded me of how filmmakers would put two movie reels together by pretty much just taping them, sometimes sacrificing a couple frames. From there is a nice big melody, but once again it falls victim to repetitiveness as it goes on for another whole minute before filtering out.

After listening to it for a second time, I think that the main problem this piece suffers from is that there is too much of too little. I understand this is trance, but a little variety goes a long way. If you really want to grab a labels attention, send them something that they won't forget.