Loathsome Creature: The Nosferatu

Vampire: The Masquerade

We’re coming down to the end of open development for Lore of the Clans. As a note, Brujah is running late, so I’ll get that up as soon as I get it and review it.

But today we present the Nosferatu, written by Andrew Peregrine. Andrew is pretty much right on for his wordcount. I have some thoughts, but I’d like to hear what you have to say. I’ll close comments on this one on Wednesday, September 17th, right before Nashville By Night. I’ll put a big note on the document and this post when I close it so it’s clear.

Before I give you the link, a few things to keep in mind as you read:

Discuss, but be polite: A few people are confusing “expressing concern” with “insulting other people.” If you are concerned about something, please express those concerns concretely — I do want to hear them. If you veer into insulting the writer, Onyx Path Publishing, or other commentators, I’ll ask you politely to stop (which, so far, is all I’ve needed to do). Anything after that, I’ll shut the conversation down and move on.

Keep calm and carry on: This is a preliminary draft. Things will likely change between this draft and the final book. If you see something weird or that you don’t agree with, don’t freak out. Just comment on the concerning area, and I’ll look into it. That’s exactly what this process is for.

Comments only, please: Everyone (except me) is restricted to comments only and suggestions. Please use comments only, and do not write your opinions into the draft text. Don’t resolve someone else’s comments or mine, either.

Substance over style: I’m focusing purely on the content, not punctuation or grammar. That kind of refinement of the material will happen in a later draft. Don’t worry too much about commenting on those concerns, unless such an error makes the material confusing to understand.

Cards close to my chest: Because I don’t want to bias the discussion, I’m keeping my thoughts on how I want to redline this chapter to myself. I’ll certainly answer questions and help steer conversation away from unproductive avenues, but in general I want to see what you think, not tell you what I think.

And now, here’s the link to the Google Doc:

Edit: Link removed now that open development is closed. Thank you!