Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

Vision: Good God, has this happened to me. Just at a first glance I can tell that something serious just went down, and it really makes me want to explore the story in it further.Originality: Rainbow isn't really my favorite pony, mainly because her brash, abrasive attitude reminds me of my childhood bullies. Seeing her in a state of submission and of failure really helps give her some more depth as a character, and depth is necessary if you want your character to be universally loved. Just seeing the tears falling down this sad little filly's face nearly brings tears to my own eyes. The one thing I could say is that you REALLY did not need to put Derpy in here. I understand that it is supposed to be a counterpoint to the pain that Rainbow is feeling, but this obvious bit of fan service detracts from the whole experience. If you were to redo this, I suggest that you change Derpy to a anonymous pegasus, just so that the original counterpoint is there, but people won't be distracted from the main message of the story. Besides, Derpy getting an A+ while Rainbow gets a D-? C'mon dude, give our cyan friend some credit.Technique: Very good drawing here, and I especially liked how you gave everything an orange filter so that it would seem more like it was evening. However, some of the lines seem a little slap dash, particularly on the lockers. Fluttershy's mouth also seems a little awkward looking, and her wings aren't as polished up as the rest of the drawing. Good work, but keep thoselittle things in mind.Impact: This picture hit me like a ton of bricks wrapped around a Halo 3 Gravity Hammer, and it was for all the right reasons. The pain and sadness, the true crushing dread of knowing that you've failed at something you've tried so hard to succeed at, that is what makes a picture stick out. It doesn't all have to be flashy visuals and bright colors, sometimes all it has to be is a sad little filly after a bad day at school.Overall: A remarkable picture that will definitely be going on my iPad and in my favorites. You sir, are a master at telling a story without words, and if you just fix up the few little technique niggles and your desire to Appel to the fans so much, and you will have something truly deserving of calling a masterpiece. Feel free to comment if you disagree, and I hope to see more of your art in future!