Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

Well, let's see. Artistically, it's just a tad sloppy. But that's okay, considering the speed at which these are put out! Story-wise, it reads just like a good fan-fic, but with pictures (duh. sorry). One thing I would like to note is the spacial awareness and perspective. Background items get smaller, but don't gradually converge to any point. On perspective, you tend to draw items layered behind other items with odd, crooked lines (note the TV and its stand in panel 20). And oh god the back of Dinky's head. I would suggest practicing drawing a pony's head from multiple angles, just to get consistency. Consistency, of course, being the last major problem, mostly with faces. Sizes and proportions don't usually match up (quick example: from panels 21-22, Bon-Bon's nose changes size, as do her ears).In summary: the storyline is great and intriguing. The art could use some work, but if you're trying to balance speed and quality, I could live with that. Practice faces.