Hello!~ I'm from First of all, I have to say I LOVE this piece, very original. I haven't read your story but I just might cause this is so cool looking!There are some things you could work on with this drawing (every drawing could use improvement most of the time, no matter your skill level), most noticeable thing being anatomy. When you draw a character, think of them as a real person. (especially when in a "just standing around" pose like this one) People who are "just standing around" wouldn't stand with their arms 5 inches away from their bodies, most likely their arms would be at their sides. Try and draw bodies more relaxed. It helps to think of a body like a bunch of shapes when drawing it, arms being ovals, torsos being triangles, stuff like that. (you don't have to use those specific shapes, i was just using them as an example) Another thing you could do to improve your drawing is tone down the shading a bit. You can fix that by just lowering the opacity on the shading layer. Also, when you draw hair try and do it in more locks. It just being straight down with no texture like that makes it look bland when it doesn't have to be.Keep up the good work!