Turn Yourself Inside Out: The Malkavians

Open Development, Vampire: The Masquerade

FOR LATECOMERS, OPEN DEVELOPMENT ON THIS CLAN IS NOW CLOSED. THANK YOU FOR YOUR COMMENTS!

Next on the open development tour for Lore of the Clans is Clan Malkavian, written by Rob Wieland. The link to the Google Doc containing his material is here:

Edit: Link removed now that open development is closed. Thank you!

Rob’s under his word count, because I cut some player advice which doesn’t make sense for the book. I have some ideas on what to replace that with, but I’m curious to see if your comments reinforce my instincts, or point in a different direction. I’ll close comments on this one on Monday, July 28th. I’ll put a big note on the document when I close it so it’s clear.

A few things to keep in mind (and I’ll be repeating these points a lot):

Comments only: Trying to open the documents to editing didn’t work out, so I’m restricting them to comments only. Don’t resolve someone else’s comments or mine, but feel free to discuss whatever makes sense. Please keep it civil, though.

Keep calm and carry on: This is a preliminary draft. Things will likely change between this draft and the final book. If you see something weird or that you don’t agree with, don’t freak out and tell the Internet OMG VAMPIRE IS RUINT. Just comment on the concerning area, and I’ll look into it. Certainly don’t give the writer shit for it.

Substance over style: Last time I did a lot of style editing (capitalization, commas, grammar, etc.) in the open development draft. That was ultimately a waste of everyone’s time, especially mine. This time, I’m focusing purely on the content, not punctuation or grammar. That’s a later draft. Don’t worry too much about marking up the manuscript for those concerns, unless something makes the material confusing to understand.

Cards close to my chest: Because I don’t want to bias the discussion, I’m keeping my thoughts on how I want to redline this chapter to myself. I’ll certainly answer questions and help steer conversation away from unproductive avenues, but in general I want to see what you think, not tell you what I think.

Enjoy!