Overall

Vision Vision

Originality Originality

Technique Technique

Impact Impact

I like to break my crits down to what the different categories mean to me in reference to your art work. That way you know why I rated you in each category.Vision: Is it clear in both art and meaning? Can I also see the artist intended to convey?Yes. You get a solid 4 stars in that aspect because I not only understood the hilarity of the joke, but you used the facial expressions and the panels to accentuate it. For start to finish I understood what was going on and the laughs you were going for. I enjoyed how this even actually poked fun at the Apple/dash pairing that so much of the fanbase seems to adore. The characters were clear, enjoyable, and all of there expressions were very reasonable and easy to understand. I did detract some points though, because if you aren't familiar with the series you wouldn't understand the context of the lying. It's something that's not easy to convey in such a limited comic, and still keep it simple. but there could have been a subtle way of expressing it.Originality: Did the artist use original ideas, content, writing, style, etc. Basically did this artist make something that only s/he could make?Fanart tends to be quite difficult to make truly original. I've seen people do it, but they have to break some heavy molds. Not being original is not inherently a bad thing. People use unoriginality to in many good ways, that benefit them. But it does not excuse anything. Everyone who draws fanart must be held to the same standards, or it wouldn't be fair to the people who are truly original. Anyway, the style that you used is based heavily on the FiM style. But you add your own touches to express yourself. Because you relied upon the original material, It comes along very nice and it makes the ponies recognizable, even if it sacrifices your own originality in the process. The joke is something I know i've heard before in relation to many other "liar" scenarios. You remixed it though and presented it in a fresh way. Kudos. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title="(Smile)"/> I could and have seen others express this kind of joke before so originality has kinda taken its blow.Techinique: Does the style, colors, and foundation of the comic all work? Is the "way" it is drawn and presented done in a masterful way? Has the artist "mastered" the way they drew. And is the way they drew working for their purpose?Basically your line work doesn't know what it wants yet. On some ponies there will be clean smooth lines, and in others it'll be sketchy and rushed. Either style works, but this piece can't seem to decide what works the best. That might be something you'll want to refine in the future. You also use a rather washed out color scheme, that is reminiscent of old Sunday comic cartoons. It works great with your speech bubbles and when Apple goes grey. But it really doesn't work with the backgrounds. They are also very washed out and don't give your character art justice. They also detract from the color of your characters. Maybe not rainbow and Pinkie, because they are both very bright. But the washed out similar color backgrounds really do a blow on Discord and apple. I think this piece could really benefit from some revamped backgrounds. It's something I would encourage you to explore. Other than that, you command facial expression and body expression well. You command the personality of the characters very well to enhance your points. And the dialogue is natural and hilarious. You seem to have great control over the whole piece and other than the backgrounds and some of the line work you are "master" of your own techniques. They work just how you need them to.Impact: To me impact is the over all. How did everything in and about the piece affect me? Art is so often about evoking emotion and feelings.You did that in spades! As far as feeling goes, I got the funny, I understood your joke, All the expressions and movement and even some of the colors helped to strengthen your joke. The dirty humor was executed well and not forced. My only disappointment is there was no subtle underlying jokes. You started hinting at Apple using and doing something naughty and then you just came out and spilled the beans about what she will do. It works, and its funny. but you don't leave very much wondering for the readers. No room for them to wonder and interpret. Just lots of room for those naughty mental images that they are sure to have, and possibly draw up later. But I would definitely have to agree with pinky in this. You did funny quite well, and It was indeed hilarious. Though The last speech bubble was prolly not necessary and it would have laid more focus on Rainbow's reaction if you had left it out.Anyway, overall I think you did quite well and accomplished what you set out to do with it. Which was most probably humor. Dirty humor. Even people who are not pony fans or bronies can enjoy this. Even if they may not understand the context. It just means they have to ask questions if they are curious. Which isn't a bad thing. All in all, great job.