and oh aww man i still have not played P5 yet :>But anyways ill start commenting from top to bottom, at first the hair. although it looks nice at first glance, it lacks detail and accuracy and a bit messy. some of the shading lines at should fade a bit at the end to overall give the hair a more flowy look. Now the face, the nose alignment don't match with the shadows, it gives it an odd look. Also if you look closely, makoto's eye clashes with the stalk of the nose. A way to fix this is to make it shorter and fix the alignment, imagine a straight line going to the chin, that is where the nose is supposed to be.Over at the body, if you notice it is too tall. This is because the waist to head ratio is a bit odd. Rough estimation is that her waist should be about 0.8 her head size. In this piece it is roughly 1+ of her head size. The arms are of the correct length, but looks long and disproportional to the long body. This is tricky and i admit i have a lot of trouble drawing the torso , so don't feel bad :>Ok lastly, the skirt, and i have to say i love this, the way you flow made the skirt flow made it feel soft and the clothes fold for the skirt are at the right places. Good job, The pattern could use some improvement but minor details ^^As for colouring, try using more dynamic shades, even the persona series if you notice use vibrant colours for shading. Don't be afraid to use yellow as a highlight for brown. You'll be surprised on how fabulous your artwork would look n.n The backgrounds are nice but making them a bit blur so it gives makoto the main spotlight or you could do it the other way around and make makoto in higher resolution n.nAnyways this artwork has potential, keep up the good work