Hey everyone, you know the funny thing is that people say that the real work begins after the successful Kickstarter launch. Make no mistake about it that running a Kickstarter is a tremendous amount of work – delivering the book is a different beast altogether.

That’s a huge obligation, after all many people pledged to the Digitopia 1.0 Kickstarter, in fact over a hundred, perhaps you’re one of them (hi).

Warning: I’ve tried to keep this update spoiler free but there may be some minor spoilers divulged in this update.

Now we’re into delivery mode

The team and I have been working with a professional Comic Book Editor Hassan Ostmane Elhaou to rewrite the script. What was interesting about this was that we had re-written the original script about 4 times before going to layout.

Now I had thought that after all that re-writing that the panels would just naturally transition to the comic book page – It doesn’t quite go like that.

Once you’re in layout new questions come along.

No matter how much effort was put into the re-writing process, actually drawing the panels show what’s working, what’s not working – and yes more re-writing is needed.

So how do you go about this?

The aesthetic versus the story telling

Comics are obviously a visual medium, and any visual medium has an aesthetic versus a story telling conflict. This is nothing new, but you have to trust the artists involved that the storytelling drives the aesthetic and not the other way around.

So I suggest if you’re looking for an artist, find one who is a good story teller – I’m lucky that Seb is a storyteller who understands how to use images for pacing, characterisation and narrative.

Here’s a few pages to show how the layout evolves from the script.

You can see from these pages how the story flow is such a necessary element to get right before pushing ahead with the artwork

time spent in edit and layout is a real investment in the story.

So what happens when the layout is different to the script?

Will this has definitely happen here. Let’s take one of the examples where we’ve deviated (trust me this happened more than just once) – we have a scene where the Jay is attacked by a biker gang.

Originally I had written it to be 5 pages

Hassan came back saying 5 changes is too long for this – I think we all knew this was true

I reduced it to 4 pages Reducing it to 4 pages meant we had to change the story flow of the other pages it also changed our end point of where issue 1 ended

Seb put it into layout, where we found there was too many panels to try to squeeze in 4 pages the way I had written it meant that the actions couldn’t all be shown or if they were to be shown there would be about a dozen panels per page the panels would have to be so small to fit onto a page

so the choice is to go back up to 5 pages or cut some of the action to squeeze it into 4 pages

we actually tried to get it into 3 pages as there were other story elements we wanted to put in – we really know where we wanted to end issue 1 so we had to make some choices

we went through the dialogue on the biker scene (and the scene just before it), and found better ways to communicate the same information, essentially finding different ways to say the same thing which meant we could cut half a page of it and still get to the same resolution

On top of this there are likeness awards for 4 of the bikers which were claimed during the Kickstarter – we definitely want to honour those awards

And that was just one scene – currently we’ve managed to get the whole sequence to 4 pages now – it may change by the time I finish writing this blog post 🙂

Sharing opinions

So how on earth do we share this when the four of us are spread out over 4 locations, 11, 603km and there’s a 13 hour time difference between us?

So we use four tools to manage this

Slack for communicating

Trello for scheduling

Skype for speaking and

Google docs to make sense of it all

Here’s an example of how we decided on the final layout for the biker scene, we continuously speak in Slack

We’re talking about 2 scenes – when you’ve got a set page count you have consider any cuts made to one scene can allow space for any number of other scenes – which scene you cut from and which you give extra space to is a constant discussion.

So we jumped on a Skype call – again when juggling full time jobs, family and other commitments finding time for all the team members to meet isn’t always feasible – you really have to trust each other and the tools to get the decisions made and communicated.

Google Docs has this really great annotation feature to mark up images in – it’s right in the tool, I found this out on Skype by accident as Simon and I were speaking I drew a marquee over an area and it gave me the option to add an annotation – nice one GDrive team!

I then was able to link to each of these comments directly in Slack – which made it a lot easier to communicate what could be quite a complicated process.

Tracking changes

With all these changes going on over multiple pages, the next challenge was

to track it all,

make sure that the pages are in sync,

that no pieces of dialogue or panels have gone missing

all whilst trying to preserve some sanity?

So I built up another Google Sheet here.

As spreadsheets go, this is at least one of the more exciting ones I’ve put together.

The first column shows the page number

the second column shows the scene we’re in

in the third column I tried to keep to three specific questions What’s in the scene

How does it move the story forwards – one of the main lessons I learnt from writing classes is, if the scene doesn’t move the story forwards then drop it , when working on comics, we get down to whether each panel moves the story forwards Does it link to another page? – this is important to know whether we’re going to re-visit this scene/page, whether this scene/page closes of an earlier one or whether this scene/page sets something up later in the script – again if the answer is ‘No’ then we have to consider whether it should be in the script.



in the fourth column we compare whether the script and layout are in sync – this is where we have to come up with a fix if we’re out of sync



– this is where we have to come up with a fix if we’re out of sync I think putting the thumbnail in the final column is as valuable as any of the others as we can visually see the how the comic flows

We actually did this for the whole script for issue 1, here’s how that spreadsheet looks

You can see that scene F was one that we cut from this issue – it’s going to move to issue 2, again that is something that we couldn’t have know unless we went through this process – in fact scene F was never written in the actual script, it was added in edit, shifted in layout.

Does this mean the layout will translate to inks?

Well the team and I are aiming to get the layouts finalled this week (week commencing 23rd July 18) – we’ll then move to inks, I’m hoping that it will be consistent and plain sailing from here on it, but similarly to how the pages change from script to layout, there may be some more modifications as we move into inks – not withstanding any brainwaves we may have to change the script between now and then.

Thanks for reading this far, I’d love to hear your feedback on any similar projects/experiences you may have had and the methods you used to resolve the issues – the best place for that is the comments’ section below.

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Thanks

Farhan