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As always, ignore the ratings. The site won't let me critique without quantifying these fields, and I don't even know exactly what they all mean. Silliness! Pure silliness!Hokay, so first thing. The model is excellent. Gorgeous face, kickin bod, lighting is excellent, great texture for the skin, etc. The only thing that isn't working for me here is the hair, and I should state up front that I think hair is usually a weakness of this CG (3D??) medium. But here it doesn't seem up to the same standards as the rest of her and I think you could easily improve it. What throws it off is the sort of whispy-clump bits in her face and towards the sides, and I'm going to divide the to-be-improved hair into those two groups because my suggestions will be a little different.The hair off to the sides seems a bit off because for the hair to appear in clumps like that AND have that space between the clumps as they blow out to the side AND have straight ends rather than curls, it would have to be pretty hard and stiff. So you lose the soft feel, and I'm left wondering why the hair is behaving that way. So the problem is separation between the clumps of hair If you just got rid of all the hair where the clumps start separating from one another it would like fine.Actually, even if just the hair one ONE side of her head were doing that, it would be better. It would look more like the wind was just pushing it around rather than like she has hard hair that can support its own weight in clumps while it for some reason juts out to the sides.For the hair in her face, I would just make them more solid. The two really thin wisps that frame her right eye are perfect. The other clumps, where you've put space in between the hairs, are too translucent. It sort of looks like maybe you've just dried the hair and it's really static-y but for some reason instead of flying out in all directions or clinging to your face it's still sort of semi-clumping. So the problem there is the space between hairs /within/ the clumps, rather than the space between the clumps.Does any of this make sense? I've never in my life described hair in such detail, and I'm struggling for vocabulary.The second thing is her eyes. Specifically, how they're aimed. Without any context to guide me, I see this picture and assume she's posed like that because she's focused on the micros on her body. Her face is turned to her hand, which is lifted with the index finger extended as though to support the micros, but her eyes are looking *past* it all, at something in the distance we don't see.I also wouldn't include those flower designs off to the side, but that's getting more subjective. The flowers sort of act as a meta-reminder that I'm looking at a portrait here, and so they get in the way of me just getting immersed in the image.Anyway, this is gorgeous work, but those are some quick and easy things you can look to in order to make the next on even better. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title="(Big Grin)"/>