The story is great and I liked the logic behind how and why everything was happening with the system bugging out. That was clever. The story is set up nicely and it's a fun read. It's got depth, likeable characters, and decent world building. I wish it were a bit more immersive? Hard to explain but it's I'm like half sucked into the world, but also still very aware that it isn't real. I don't know how to achieve better immersion, not a writer, but that's just my gut feeling.

It's clear that the story is a draft though because you'll see some minor errors here and there (doesn't detract from story), but if you reach the end of the book, the author says he has an editor now working on going through his book so they'll probably be fixed eventually. I was too lazy to comment the errors I found while I read, but given that I'm taking time to write a review anyways, I might as well list them here. Which means the following paragraph will contain spoilers.

As for what they are, big spoilers coming, if I remember correctly, Eli throws down his bow down during his first fight against adventurers after it cracks or something but he has it again later on when he uses it to finish the fight after tossing his dagger as a distraction. He loots a sword from one of the adventurers after that fight, but we never see it again. When he gains the skill "analyze" I'm pretty sure it was spelled "analize" or something (I remember it had an "i" instead of a y). He gains a skill to 1% chance of detecting if someone is lying. Skill never gets triggered. I assume it had a purpose at one point, so I hope it gets utilized eventually. That's minor, but the biggest unexplained plot hole so far is that the guards recognize the death of his former self and his family even though we later learn that his existance gets replaced by a new replica of them, meaning the guards shouldn't recognize Eli, Kata, Savannah, and Eric having ever died at all. Not to mention, his gear also duplicates by having two Eli's. However, new Kata does mysteriously ask if Eli's name is Eli Miller, so it's confusing now, but perhaps it gets explained in book 2 on how that works from a logical standpoint from the NPC's view?