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MIME-Version: 1.0 Received: by 10.25.84.7 with HTTP; Sat, 5 Dec 2015 12:38:20 -0800 (PST) In-Reply-To: <CAAEwKfyaQwVAj-7YfO4+=LhBcpJ+wfZN8cAptzzs-3tMhycJvg@mail.gmail.com> References: <CAAEwKfyaQwVAj-7YfO4+=LhBcpJ+wfZN8cAptzzs-3tMhycJvg@mail.gmail.com> Date: Sat, 5 Dec 2015 15:38:20 -0500 Delivered-To: john.podesta@gmail.com Message-ID: <CAE6FiQ_OGzfr=64BUwN-f-SKHdT36YmFdX1oc39n10SePLqwDQ@mail.gmail.com> Subject: Re: UPDATED: HRC speech at Saban Forum From: John Podesta <john.podesta@gmail.com> To: Dan Schwerin <dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com> CC: Laura Rosenberger <lrosenberger@hillaryclinton.com>, Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com> Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary=001a11473096c5d74305262c9a2b --001a11473096c5d74305262c9a2b Content-Type: text/plain; charset=UTF-8 A few points: I would encourage her to make the Sandy points more personal. On page 3, graph 3, I think I would say working to determine possible contacts of the perpetrators with radical jihadist networks On page 4, last graph I think the sentence "Countering Iran and defeating ISIS are not distinct missions--they are intimately related." Is intellectually flabby and can get us in more trouble than it's worth. Saying that we have to deal with both problems simultaneously is not the same as implying that both need resolution or neither can be solved. On page 16, in the graph beginning Many Americans feel a deep emotional connection...the paragraph is about Israel, but evokes how people feel about how Israel is treating the Palastinians. I think I'd cut or rework. On Friday, December 4, 2015, Dan Schwerin <dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com> wrote: > Good evening, sharing this revised draft of HRC's Saban speech. Thanks > for the great feedback so far. The news from California continues to move > quickly, so we'll keep adjusting that section as we learn more. As for the > rest, if you'd take one more look, that would be great. > Many thanks > Dan > > --001a11473096c5d74305262c9a2b Content-Type: text/html; charset=UTF-8 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable A few points:<div><br><div>I would encourage her to make the Sandy points m= ore personal.</div><div><br></div><div>On page 3, graph 3, I think I would = say working to determine possible contacts of the perpetrators with radical= jihadist networks</div><div><br></div><div>On page 4,=C2=A0last graph I th= ink the sentence "Countering Iran and defeating ISIS are not distinct = missions--they are intimately related." Is intellectually flabby and c= an get us in more trouble than it's worth. Saying that we have to deal = with both problems simultaneously is not the same as implying that both nee= d resolution or neither can be solved.</div><div><br></div><div>On page 16,= in the graph beginning Many Americans feel a deep emotional connection...t= he paragraph is about Israel, but evokes how people feel about how Israel i= s treating the Palastinians. I think I'd cut or rework.<br><br>On Frida= y, December 4, 2015, Dan Schwerin <<a href=3D"mailto:dschwerin@hillarycl= inton.com">dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com</a>> wrote:<br><blockquote class= =3D"gmail_quote" style=3D"margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padd= ing-left:1ex"><div dir=3D"ltr">Good evening, sharing this revised draft of = HRC's Saban speech.=C2=A0 Thanks for the great feedback so far.=C2=A0 T= he news from California continues to move quickly, so we'll keep adjust= ing that section as we learn more. As for the rest, if=C2=A0you'd take = one more look, that would be great.=C2=A0<div class=3D"gmail_quote"><div di= r=3D"ltr"><div><div><div><div style=3D"font-size:13px">Many thanks</div></d= iv></div></div><span><font color=3D"#888888"><div style=3D"font-size:13px">= Dan</div></font></span></div> </div><br></div> </blockquote></div></div> --001a11473096c5d74305262c9a2b--