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Hello Riri,I am going to attempt critique on this site for the first time- haha, bear with me.I am not sure what "vision" means, but I'm guessing appearnace? Or is it something that you envisioned before completing this piece? If it is appearance, then it did successfully captured my attention in my message inbox. Great work!Gijinka. That's one point down. Besides that, I don't really see a concept here. Probably having a cloudy background could tell something about her being the morning glory to all other ponies? What kind of story/message are you trying to communicate? Your title includes the word "gakusei" so is she going to school? Did she just wake up?If you are going for just a "pretty image" then you're heading in the right direction. The only thing I would change if you were heading for this route is to not include only half of her legs. This makes me question where she's standing. Floating?Colour wise, I think you rocked it. The background colours really blend well with the character's. Even though this is a digital drawing, I like how you included a painterly look to it to make it look more 'natural' and organic. Watch out for the transition between Celestia's line-art to the background though. Your Princess Luna's line work is a good example of a subtle transition. Therefore, you could think about toning down the line-art's intensity here a little.Typography wise, I think you need to work on this a little more. The japanese symbols you used are what I predict to be the "default" settings for that language. I know there are a lot more typefaces you could choose from with a little more research. Google has a ton of japanese fonts to choose from! Also, I find the black colour you chose a bit harsh on the artwork- it does not really blend well.Who is your target audience? Most likely MLP fans will rank first then the rest of the deviantArt fandom. Since this is a gijinka version of Celestia, people who see this might gain an insight of your interpretation of a non-human character. I am not sure what people can take away from this artwork besides the fact that it is stunning.All in all, I think you're improving really quickly! For next time, try to come up with a concept, careful with your line-work, watch out for anatomy, play around with typography, and just have fun.Thank you,-Cune