I'm going to actually add a second comment to this. I just read the whole thing, and seriously? Did you think this was a good idea?

I'm not trying to "tear you a new one" or anything, but this is a disturbingly inappropriate tale for the tone of the site in my opinion.

I don't know if you're going to rewrite, or try again, but please, for the love of all that is holy (and the collective blood pressure of the members) leave out the step by step explanation of torture, rape, and descent in to hell.