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My tag-word was 'retreat', and since a retreat can also mean a vacation, I decided to pick this piece, since it looks like the girls are on a vacation. :3





First off, I want to compliment the composition! I like how you put the characters all into different positions and places, each within the character's personality. I also really enjoy seeing platonic interactions between the four girls, so that's a big plus!



Anatomy-wise, most of it is pretty good! I especially love how Blake is drawn; the anatomy and fore-shortening is really good! Especially her hand holding the chopsticks. I would say that the only character where the anatomy looks odd is Yang. The arms and general positioning is good, but something about her body looks off, especially in the chest and torso area. Sadly, I'm not fully certain what exactly is off here, so I'm not able to tell you how to fix it. It just doesn't look quite right.



The main area I would have to critique is the shading. While the shading overall is generally fine and doesn't necessarily make the picture look bad, it could be improved on. It seems to me that you mostly use darker forms of the main color for shading. While this isn't necessarily bad, I would suggest trying to use other colors to shade as well. I personally find that reds, blues, and purples added to my shading help make it look better, especially on the skin.



However, my main gripe with the shading is that it looks unfinished. There are areas in this piece where there should be darker shadows then there are. Such as area on Yang's neck; the head should be casting that area into a much darker shadow than is shown. The kotatsu should also be casting a darker shadow onto the floor. The area with the flowers and the scroll on the wall should be darker since it appears to be in an area of the room that isn't getting as much light as the rest of the room, and the flowers themselves should be casting a shadow on the shelf. The pillow on which Blake is sitting should cast a shadow.



I also think you should work on decided where the light in the picture is coming from. They are indoors, but I don't know where the light is coming from. Is it from a light on the roof? Or is it from a window? If so, then the rooms shadows should be consistent in falling away from that light source.





In any case, I still love this drawing! It's such a wholesome piece, and I hope you create more drawings like it! I hope that this helps somehow! If you have any questions, feel free to ask, since I'm not certain that I was able to fully convey what I meant in some places. xD





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