Post by pulpfree » Wed Jun 28, 2017 7:25 pm

Hey allfirst attempt at a cock hero, I've been studying and getting advice for the last couple months and re-doing rounds multiple times but I'm finally at a place where I'd like to share a bit and get some larger feedback. I'm still planning on adding 2 or 3 more rounds to this as well possibly reworking things a little bit. Just hoping I can get some feedback on what is good / what could be improved and what people don't like.The idea was based off of a few different series but mainly the mr. edger self control series. I was heavily influenced by Prime University and Canto I as well and wanted to go with a story but my writing isn't the best and realized I need work on that a bit more before I start to take on any larger writing project.I mainly didn't want to follow the pattern of mr. edger, I wanted to center each round on a girl that is trying to make you break the rules and cum early for her. I know a lot of people enjoy the tease / build up and I feel like even though the first few rounds aren't too "hardcore" they aren't your typical tease / build up rounds...so I'm really hoping people will still enjoy it. I think round 3 /4 are the best so far though.I'm hoping to get the most feedback on the writing, the amount of time text stays on screen...if it's enough time to read etc., beats sounding good / making sense, etc., etc.Hope you enjoy!